I Got A Feeling (2nd Rewrite)
Copyright 2015 by Wes Tibbets

VERSE ONE


I don't want to rush things
So I'll just bite my tongue
I wanna say three little words
But I don't wanna jump the gun
I'm gonna just take it slow
Leave it on cruise control
I'm gonna wait til the time is right
Further down the road


CHORUS


I've got a feeling
Burning in my soul
It's a raging desire
Going out of control
It starts with an I
And ends with you
I got a funny feelin'
Can you feel it too


VERSE TWO


There I went and said it
I've put it all on the line
It's your turn to say it too
If it's the way you feel inside
You say you're so excited
Baby, I know what you mean
I've been carryin' that same feelin'
Everywhere with me


CHORUS


I've got a feelin'
Burning in my soul
It's a raging desire
Going out of control
It starts with an I
And ends with you
I got a funny feelin'
Can you feel it too


BRIDGE


This bottled up emotion
Is more than just a notion
I can't hold it inside
When you're always on my mind


CHORUS


I've got a feelin'
Burning in my soul
It's a raging desire
Going out of control
It starts with an I
And ends with you
I got a funny feelin'
Can you feel it too


TAG


I got a funny feelin'
Can you feel it too

Carl B
#1
Hey, Wes

Only thing that sticks out is......

VERSE TWO

I've went and said it now
I've put it all on the line
It's your turn to say it too
If it's the way you feel inside
You say that you can hardly breathe   (Not sure this best illustrates her feelings of love,
unless the intention is to show that she's anxious and unsure but in love and or overwhelmed and ready to literally faint. I don't know.... Seems a little too extreme to me.
Baby, I know what you mean
I've been carryin' that same feelin'
Everywhere with me


****** Perhaps something like...........   You say that you feel or get excited or You're excited

Just some thoughts - Nothing major    : )


Carl

Wes Tibbets
#2
Hi Carl,

I hope you've had a great day. Thank you for checking it out and for the great suggestion. "Excited" was a lot closer to what I was striving for there. Some times my mind doesn't work right when I am writing. I'll be searching and searching for the right phrase and the whole time it's right there under my nose. That's why I like coming into these songwriting forums. They help me catch myself when I'm stymied. Many thanks for helping me. Best wishes!
Arty Redsocks
#3
Wes
Really liked this, in many ways the best I have read of yours. More definition between verses which is good.

It brings up a couple of points re song development and the chorus as to how the verses hit the chorus, for me it works very well for V2 but is itself jumping the gun for V1, the making a chorus work for disparate verses is the greatest skill of songwriting and the agony lol.

The first verse for me are just these lines which got me to the point and said it all, the other lines just reiterated the point and slowed it all down.

I don't want to rush things
So I'll just bite my tongue
I wanna say three little words
But I don't wanna jump the gun

This would have a subsequent reduction in V2 unless you made it a VCVBV song which would work very well in this type of song


Good luck it certainly has potential


Arty
Wes Tibbets
#4
Thanks Arty!

I appreciate you checking it out and the kind words. I hope you folks on your side of the world have a great day. I appreciate the encouragement and input. Best wishes!
Les Service
#5
Hi Wes

Quite like the idea you got going for this, guess most will have had the same feeling of wanting to say those words but held back.

i can only offer a couple of thoughts, minor tweaks that may or may not work for you.

1st line V2
There now I've said it .....breaks up the 2 Ives?

chorus I thought growing instead of going might work as it will go with the 2nd verse where you blurt it out! Does that make sense?

anyway I enjoyed the read had melody going in my head All trough.

good luck

Les
Wes Tibbets
#6
Hi Les,
Thanks for dropping in and having a look. I appreciate the kind words. You are right about the two "I've's" to start off the second verse. I made a change in that area. Best wishes!
Kip Marchetti
#7
Another good lyric ... a word here ... a word there ... all subject to change depending on the melody ... the singer ... the vibe
Good job.
Wes Tibbets
#8
Thanks Kip,

I'm glad you like it. I appreciate you stopping by and checking it out. I hope you and yours are doing well. Best wishes!
Larry Killam
#9
Enjoyed Da read wes.i was thinking maybe changing the last line in the Chorus to One can become two/.All Da Best with it Wes.
Dennis Wright
#10
Wes you did a good job my friend. I love it. 
Wes Tibbets
#11
Thanks Larry and Dennis,

Kip did a recording of this song. It should be somewhere in the Open Mic forum. I really enjoyed working with him on the songs we did together. He's a cool fellow. I hope you are both doing good. Best wishes!