Hi Wes
Quite like the idea you got going for this, guess most will have had the same feeling of wanting to say those words but held back.
i can only offer a couple of thoughts, minor tweaks that may or may not work for you.
1st line V2
There now I've said it .....breaks up the 2 Ives?
chorus I thought growing instead of going might work as it will go with the 2nd verse where you blurt it out! Does that make sense?
anyway I enjoyed the read had melody going in my head All trough.
good luck
Les
Quite like the idea you got going for this, guess most will have had the same feeling of wanting to say those words but held back.
i can only offer a couple of thoughts, minor tweaks that may or may not work for you.
1st line V2
There now I've said it .....breaks up the 2 Ives?
chorus I thought growing instead of going might work as it will go with the 2nd verse where you blurt it out! Does that make sense?
anyway I enjoyed the read had melody going in my head All trough.
good luck
Les
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