Wes
Really liked this, in many ways the best I have read of yours. More definition between verses which is good.
It brings up a couple of points re song development and the chorus as to how the verses hit the chorus, for me it works very well for V2 but is itself jumping the gun for V1, the making a chorus work for disparate verses is the greatest skill of songwriting and the agony lol.
The first verse for me are just these lines which got me to the point and said it all, the other lines just reiterated the point and slowed it all down.
I don't want to rush things
So I'll just bite my tongue
I wanna say three little words
But I don't wanna jump the gun
This would have a subsequent reduction in V2 unless you made it a VCVBV song which would work very well in this type of song
Good luck it certainly has potential
Arty
Really liked this, in many ways the best I have read of yours. More definition between verses which is good.
It brings up a couple of points re song development and the chorus as to how the verses hit the chorus, for me it works very well for V2 but is itself jumping the gun for V1, the making a chorus work for disparate verses is the greatest skill of songwriting and the agony lol.
The first verse for me are just these lines which got me to the point and said it all, the other lines just reiterated the point and slowed it all down.
I don't want to rush things
So I'll just bite my tongue
I wanna say three little words
But I don't wanna jump the gun
This would have a subsequent reduction in V2 unless you made it a VCVBV song which would work very well in this type of song
Good luck it certainly has potential
Arty
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