Arty,
I'll keep in mind your suggestions re: the rhyme scheme. I was aware of that but your point about differentiating verse and chorus is noted especially when the story doesn't move. I'd be interested to see how others think about the 3rd verse vs a bridge but I will consider what you've said. Digest the idea and potential first.
Thank you!
Carl
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