Shine On Me (New Version & Original)

Hi Carl, I'm new here but I will giuve my two cents anyway. I like the revised version and thought I would throw out a line for your third verse 

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Through the highs and lows you still remain

Comforting me when I'm bowed in pain.....  Comforting me through all the pain 

From the beginning until the end

When the journey will then transcend------  Together in this journey we will transcend

The road ahead may be unknown

But with you, I'm not alone

Just a suggestion