Melancholy

V1 

Black cloud hangs over me again

Drops of sadness are falling like rain

Coming feelings of regret and sigh

That I’ve been facing through a thousand times

PreChorus:

Source of my strength to carry on

Disappearing

Like sands after lowtide

Will I be gathering on and on

Appearing

Like sands after hightide

V2 

All around is misty and blurry

No sense in what I used to worry (about)

Everything I´ve done seems to be in vain

Pleasure of it will never more remain

PreChorus:

Source of my strength to carry on

Disappearing

Like sands after lowtide

Will I be gathering on and on

Appearing

Like sands after hightide

Chorus:

Drowning in the lake of melancholy

Just head above the surface

Can´t get out all banks are slippery

My eyes looking to a white haze

Drowning in the lake of melancholy

Sands below me shifting down

Shall it last eternally?

Or will my head go down too?

Hugo

i there is music to this it probably works fine , two pre choruses don't really think it works as you have no chorus after the first two just another verse . I know you will know what it is about but leaves th e reader  a bit confused read it a couple of times and still none the wiser PO

john

Hi Hugo

This is beautifully sad. Is this lyric about lost love? I'm kind of reading it as poetry and I love it.

Hi Hugo and welcome to the Lyric Lounge and SONG RAMP. 

Deep emotions here and they are understood.  I doubt that anyone reading them has not been there. That makes them a universal subject and a great idea for a song. But there is deeper story behind these emotions which are basically the same sadness and melancholy in both verses and chorus repeated, said in different ways.

I would love to be brought into your story of suffering with who, what, when, where and how (or a combination of these) to tell the story.  Tenderly of course.  You know the story Hugo, tell us please. Beginning, middle and end, we would love to go there with you.

A meaningful chorus could carry the emotions of which you speak. The verses telling us how it was. What it became and how it ended. You have the words, they are in you. Me? I'm just a guy trying to help.

Thanks,

Gary (Forum Moderator)

This is beautiful in a dark, sad way.

Hugo, where have you gone to? You gotta spill. Was this inspired by true events or just your imagination

fired up

Yes, Hugo we sure would like to see more of your work for sure.

Hi John,

thank you for your comment.

About 2 prechorus.In this lyric I wanted to show a rising tension of melancholy in me so it's better with verses and prechorus and as a conclusion the chorus at last.

I know you are quite confused and I understand. I like to write lyrics more general than exactly write about because in general everyone could relate to it and imagine his/her problems in it.

Cheers

Hugo

Hi Jim,

thank you very much for your nice comment. I'm glad you like it.

Hugo

Hi Gwyneth,

thank you for your nice comment.

As I wrote in John's reply I like to write lyrics in general so everyone could relate to it. So this lyric could be about the lost love. In my case it's more about a feelings you feel when you're down by anything sad for example lost love.

Hugo

Hi Gary,

thank you very much for welcome and for a nice comment.

As you wrote it's universal subject. To be honest I wrote this lyric many years ago so I can't remember exactly the things behind this lyric. It was just writing my feelings when I felt out, down and lonely.

Hugo

Hi Gwyneth,

I'm sorry I'm quite busy. It was inspired by true feelings I felt when I was out, down and lonely.

Ok. Fired up

Hugo

Hi Gary,

you will.

Thank you

Hugo

Well you certainly deliver a lot of emotions in your lyrics. You should try writing a poem and put it in Poets Corner.

There's a lot less rules with poetry, you could even do a free style one that doesn't rhyme! Also you don't have to bother

with a chorus LOL - So I hope you'll think about it and post one there soon