Hi Jim, I feel your pain.
Great write but very short & stark lines. I would change it a bit & vary it slightly. Here are a few ideas, but of course it depends on the melody etc.
Alan
Youth wasted, On the young
Wisdom wasted, On the old
What I'd give For some help
Someone here to share the load
Great write but very short & stark lines. I would change it a bit & vary it slightly. Here are a few ideas, but of course it depends on the melody etc.
Alan
Youth wasted, On the young
Wisdom wasted, On the old
What I'd give For some help
Someone here to share the load
A forgotten man
Forlorn in this wretched land
Feel the pain for this lost soul
Do you even know my name
I tasted love before
A casualty, now cast free
I’m wasted by this war
Thrown away In the trash
People hate me bound to clash
Down and out On my own
She's not here I sleep alone
A forgotten man
Forlorn in this wretched land
Feel the pain for this lost soul
Can you even say my name
I tasted love before
A casualty, now cast free
I’m wasted by this war.
Alienated
Isolated
Disregarded
Alone and jaded
A forgotten man
Forlorn in this wretched land
Feel the pain for this lost soul
Can you even say my name
I tasted love before
A casualty, now cast free
I’m wasted by this war.
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