Hi Alan,
As far as v1 goes, the first two lines move fast and build momentum, so you may want to keep that going with the rest of the verse. What happens after "it was all it took"? Would he question what this is right now ("Could this be love...") or would he kind of enjoy a few more moments of discovering her? ("poise and grace..."). I don't know the answers here...lol...just throwing them out to you! My thought is, if he questions it in the middle of the verse, it slows it down, so maybe save that for the last line of the verse? "Has love arrived in this foreign land"....type of thing. That way you'll be matching the "well-thumbed book" verse as that reads all action til that final line of the verse, imo.
(Maybe we get to see a little of what happens to him too in relation to what's around him...his face gets flush, the skies get brighter...lol...etc...at those very beginning stages of seeing her...for those middle lines there).
Just a few more thoughts...
Kristi