Hi Les, Welcome to songramp and writers room
Here is a quicktake. whie its true your lines rhyme, I get no sense of rhythm
eg;
v 1
You’ll never see a wedding ring on my finger
The married life is definitely not for me
To love someone in sickness and in health
Sounds like to much responsibility
I would have said it something like this
You’ll never see a ring upon my finger
Marriage is definitely not for me
loving through all life's dramas
That's too much responsibility
my 2c worth Jdub
Hi John
Thanks for the read and comments, I have a melody in my head for it and it does work (I made a booboo with my original comment on this so I have deleted it, saying it was the same ryhme thoroughout sorry for that I dont know what I was thinking at the time) The bridge is more narrated than sung.
I will have a play with your ideas and see if I can make it similar for both verses.
Thanks again
Cheers
Les