Harley D. ( The real king of the road)

Hi Gary

Very well written and a great heart felt story to boot.

I like Dales idea of changing the bridge to a verse and offer a scenario for you.

I did think of trying to put something about his truck and the family in the last line? 

May or may not be your cup of tea but I hope it sparks something for you.

He brought the dog to the surface—pushed to the edge of the shore

But Harley never made it—his heart couldn’t take anymore

He slipped beneath the water- with one last goodbye wave

To those grateful people on the shore- the family he just saved

Overall I think this is a great peice of writing with a good solid story and imagery and would love to hear a finished song.

Good luck

Les