Larry, you have a lot of things to say in these lyrics that can be put in a way that points to the 'problems at hand' in a more lyrical, singable, song format.
The more singable it is the more people will listen. Consider the song: 'Somethings Happening Here' by the Buffalo Springfield as a nice guide. Thanks.
Gary
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