Great write, Tracy! Love the story line and the way you delivered it! Love the title (hook) and the way you used it in context of the storyline. Just one minor suggestion, though -
The word "nigh" in your first line of the song is a bit "dated" - I think it sounds too "poetic". How about changing it to "about" (you could even use "'bout" to shorten it up:
Lost my job 'bout a week ago....
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