I enjoyed your song John. Can't put my finger on it yet, but you had something in it that I want to get to. Some connection I'm missing....someone could tell me, but if I can't learn it for myself, its pointless. Maybe I'm just over thinking this whole thing. Could be as simple as applied physics....
Gerald, I just looked at some of your songs again. I actually listened to them earlier, but had forgotten what they were about. Go back and listen to John's song again and you can "see" the story unfold. Two examples are; In V1, she wasn't just smiling, she was smiling in a baseball cap and genes. She wasn't just being lazy, she was eating Chinese take out. In V2, she didn't just smile, she smilled with her 2 teeth. Then go look at your songs and see if you can "see" the story.
phil g.