Phillip (phil g.) Grigg said...
Well Kevin!! Thanks a lot!#?$! Because of that one little comment, which really is a good observation by the way, I now suddenly don't like MOST of my second verse, let alone those two lines. Now I'm doin ANOTHER re-write. About number 11 teen I think....
OK, how would love at first sight make you feel -- and then how whould show that, Mouth dry, sweat dripping off, shakes, tounge-tied, dizzy, ... the list goes on. Pick one that fits in your story and make it rhyme (ha, ha).
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