Hey Eddie,
A great story about the dark side of life well done. My two cents worth is this...nothing engraved in stone for sure.
My favorite lines, "Gonna be two men dead ~ Once the juice kicks in." Great finish Eddie!
I’ve made my share of bad decisions
More than once, I’ve made them twice (Great Line)
Driving 90 miles an hour past the exit sign (Driving is a more active mental image than drove.)
To find the road to Paradise (Road is more in the vernacular and in character with the image of the man you created.)
When they read that verdict to me (Just makes the story more personal)
There’s gonna be two men dead (I would strike the Now, the line is more punchy without it)
Gwyneth's "at least that's what the jury said." seems perfect to me. That's it..I like it. It's kind of a Folsom Prison Blues realistic.
Thanks for posting.