charles 
if you go back to this and really have a go at the rhyme and flow i think it could be something special . even as it is it has an edge to it.
you use the same words to start and finish to many of the lines , pear it down make it tight less can be more and re post .
john
                    
				if you go back to this and really have a go at the rhyme and flow i think it could be something special . even as it is it has an edge to it.
you use the same words to start and finish to many of the lines , pear it down make it tight less can be more and re post .
john
    
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