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John Westwood
#1

Just a quicky..


 


First  verse . You have a forced rhyme


Maybe change from


He was my Golden Fleece golden fleece
Wolves took him down, Piece by piece
Law suits was their plan to succeed
Spread their lies in the name of greed
They ruined his name, to criminalize
Broke his heart ….caused his demise


to


He was my Golden Fleece golden fleece
Wolves took him down, Piece by piece
Spread their lies in the name of greed
Law suits was their plan to succeed ( but this line  needs work )
They ruined his name, to criminalize
Broke his heart ….caused his demise