Hi Charles, some nice ideas going on here. In my opinion it is possibly a bit wordy. I think you could strip this down a bit, especially the chorus. You may have a melody that you are writing to, but here is just another persons's thoughts, hope ye don't mind :)
Oh & whats with all the different font colours? hahahaha
And i remembered what you'd done
my dreams almost had me fooled again
headin’ down the path of self destruction!
you belittled me, you defiled my soul
you left me with a bleeding heart
on fire out in the cold
This was all for love
All for our fake love
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