For your consideration Aaron. You have a really nice idea here. You have only two verses, (that's okay) but if you look at them closely they say pretty much the same thing in a different way. Not much story progression. It might be nice to bring the other person into the song with the pronoun 'you'. It makes the song more personal to female listeners.
I like the dance metaphor very much.
(V)
I'm still dancing with a broken heart
That it seems will never mend
Out of step with loves music
I do it over and over again
(V)
It's only because I love you so
That I want to hold you near
I'll let my mind keep telling me
You're my lifetime partner my dear
(C)
Reality says the dance is over
But the music lingers on
Every day I remember
How we danced to the same song
As long as I have those memories
I'll dream a two step across the room
It helps to take the pain away
For a love that ended way to soon
Yours to keep or sweep. I wider range of thoughts in the story are still available. This is off the top of my pumpkin head.
Gary (just a guy trying to help)
I like the dance metaphor very much.
(V)
I'm still dancing with a broken heart
That it seems will never mend
Out of step with loves music
I do it over and over again
(V)
It's only because I love you so
That I want to hold you near
I'll let my mind keep telling me
You're my lifetime partner my dear
(C)
Reality says the dance is over
But the music lingers on
Every day I remember
How we danced to the same song
As long as I have those memories
I'll dream a two step across the room
It helps to take the pain away
For a love that ended way to soon
Yours to keep or sweep. I wider range of thoughts in the story are still available. This is off the top of my pumpkin head.
Gary (just a guy trying to help)
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