Dennis,My thought on the lyrics: When I read the lyrics I hear a slow country song as opposed to a faster, honkytonk song. Also, I'm not sure what you intended for the beat, meter and melody of the song. Based on the melody I hear in my head and the length of each line, I think you need more words that rhyme. You have the story line written out, so now you need to fit it to your melody while rhyming. Using the 4 lines to a verse pattern, you can rhyme either the last words in lines 1 and 2 and a different rhyme in lines 3 and 4, or you can rhyme lines 2 and 4. I rewrote verse 1 and 2 rhyming lines 2 and 4.Sitting here alone at a Nashville barListening to a sad Tanya Tucker songThinking about how my baby left meAfter we've been together for so longI don't know what happened no I can't explainCan't help but wonder how she (he) could do me this wayI gave her my all, still it all slipped awayIt wasn't enough to make her want to stayBartender pour me a shot of that homegrown whiskeyThis one is for my baby who left me todayPour me another shot of that homegrown whiskeyOne last shot for a broken heart and bittersweet memoriesOf course, these lyrics need to be tweaked to fit the melody of the song, but they give you a rough idea of what the line 2 and 4 rhymes sound like (although I think I rhymed all the end words in verse 2). Here's verse 3 with a line 1 and 2 rhyme and line 3 and 4 rhyme:Since you left me I've been going insaneNothing I do seems to ease the painI can't stop thinking of you and how it could beWhen you walked out of my life you took a piece of meTwo tools that will help you write lyrics are a rhyming dictionary and a thesaurus. You can find them both on-line. When I can't find a good rhyme for a word, I often go to the thesaurus to find another word with the same meaning and then look for a rhyme for that word.Hope this helps.Tim
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