Head Straight for Hell

Here is one way  I would have set  out this lyric to make it easier   for old folk like me.. I made a few little  tweaks along the way .

V3  needs attention  IMO. Its  mixed with V2 . Maybe  rewrite those so each verse is on one topic

Take my comments on board or toss in the scuppers, as  you see  fit .

J

Lyric by Gwyneth Rose Bradley

v1

I see you at Mass  every single day
Always generous to the collection tray
I saw you walk past a beggar today
That was me incognito You looked the other way

chorus

Got everyone fooled, you do it so well
Such an artful act, a slick show and tell.
But you’re in for a shock.
No Hypocrites in Heaven……
They head straight for Hell…..

v2

You confess your sins at least once a week
You receive absolution safety from the beast
But I saw you covet your neighbor’s wife today
you stabbed him in the back and then ran away

chorus
Got everyone fooled,You do it so well
Such an artful act A slick show and tell.
But you’re in for a shock.
No Hypocrites in Heaven……
They head straight for Hell…..

v3

You take CommunionHoly bread and wine­
Your sins are washed clean each and every time  Where I come from this is about confession. You need a line about communion
But I saw you stealing A priceless work of art today
Sold it on the black market Said that “Crime does pay!

chorus

Got everyone fooled,You do it so well
Such an artful act, A slick show and tell.
But you’re in for a shock.
No Hypocrites in Heaven……
They head straight for Hell…..

Bridge

You don’t see me, but my eyes are on you
It makes me sad to see the things you do
You running out of timebetter change your evil ways
My name is  Gabriel……You’ll see me at the end of days!

chorus

Got everyone fooled,You do it so well
Such an artful act, A slick show and tell.
But you’re in for a shock.
No Hypocrites in Heaven……

No Hypocrites in Heaven……
No Hypocrites in Heaven……