Love Me Forever Again

Going over some old demos/lyrics. This is a re-write in it's early stages, just trying to see if this will work. Any thoughts on how to improve it, much appreciated

LOVE ME FOREVER AGAIN

Verse 1

CHILDHOOD DREAMS & FANTASIES

PAGES TORN FROM DIARIES

 ERASE THE DISTANT MEMORIES

LISTEN TO ME

LISTEN TO ME

LOST LOVE & CONSPIRACIES

CONFIRM MY INSECURITIES

Chorus

YOU SAY YOUR FEELINGS FOR ME THEY REMAIN  

IN KISSES LACED WITH CHAMPAGNE

WILL YOU LOVE ME FOREVER AGAIN

LOVE ME FOREVER AGAIN

Verse 2

HOLD ME IN THIS PRIVATE SPACE

LET ME FEEL YOUR WARM EMBRACE

WHERE  LOVERS LEAP, OUR HEARTS WILL RACE

STAY CLOSE TO ME

STAY CLOSE TO ME

TAKE ME TO A BETTER PLACE

TREASURE EVERY STEP WE TRACE

chorus

YOU SAY YOUR FEELINGS FOR ME THEY REMAIN  

IN KISSES LACED WITH CHAMPAGNE

WILL YOU LOVE ME FOREVER AGAIN

LOVE ME FOREVER AGAIN

Verse 3

A DIRT TRACK ROAD, A RUSTING CAR

THE DARK NIGHT SKY, A SHOOTING STAR

IN MOONLIGHT SHADES , THAT’S WHERE WE ARE

BE THERE FOR ME

BE THERE FOR ME

TWO  NAMES ETCHED ON OUR FAVOURITE SEAT

THIS WILL MAKE THE SCENE COMPLETE

Chorus

YOU SAY YOUR FEELINGS FOR ME THEY REMAIN  

IN KISSES LACED WITH CHAMPAGNE

WILL YOU LOVE ME FOREVER AGAIN

LOVE ME FOREVER AGAIN

I love your title.  It shows how we promise forever, than break that promise and have to make it again.  Clever!

the title shouts read this ,  and it reads pretty well the only nit  is the repeat in the middle of the verses ( if there is music it probably works fine )

but it messes up the flow when reading PO

john

The title grabbed me right off the bat. A really good hook. The first line of the chorus hangs me up because of the word they. For me they remain just doesn't sound like something someone would say. I could hear it as simply "you say your feelings for me remain".   I like this, and would like to hear it if you put it up on open mic.

Thanks for all the comments & suggestions everyone :)

Much appreciated as always. If I ever get it recorded I will post it here,

cheers

Alan

Hi Allan,

I can feel the emotion in your lyric. I like the story and the way you told it. Nice work!!!

Tony