I REALLY WOULD LIKE TO HAVE SOME ARTIST HELP PRODUCE THIS SONG
I'M A MEMBER OF THE GIDEONS AND I KNOW THEY WOULD APPRECIATE
IT AND POSSIBLE PROMOTE IT, I WOULD HOPE.
V1.
BECAUSE I GOT DISCOURAGED
FROM THE PRESSURES OF THE DAY
I THINK BACK, TO SO LONG AGO
WHEN I HEARD MY MOMMA SAY
AS SHE TOOK THAT GIDEON BIBLE
OFF THE SHELF
OFFERED ME HER HEART AND HER HELP
CHORUS:1
[TALK] "SHE SAID SON", READ IT TO BE WISE,
IT'LL OPEN UP YOUR EYES,IT'S WORDS ARE TRUE
SON IT'S THE BOOK FOR YOU
V2.
NOW WHEN I AM DISCOURAGED
I KNOW JUST WHERE TO FIND HELP
I TAKE THAT GIDEON BIBLE
OFTEN FROM THE SHELF
GIVEN TO ME BY MAMMA WITH HER LOVE
WORDS FROM MY FATHER UP ABOVE
CHORUS: 2
AND I [PAST TENSE] READ IT TO BE WISE
IT'S OPENED UP MY EYES
IT'S WORDS ARE ALL TRUE, COULD IT
BE THE BOOK FOR YOU
[FINAL THOUGHT] THE SWORD OF THE LORD
AND OF GIDEON, VICTORY WITH OH SO FEW MEN
MEN AND WOMEN TODAY, GIVE THAT SWORD AWAY
THE POWER OF GOD FOR EVERY ONE
THE SWORD OF THE LORD AND OF GIDEON
I have a few more verses that talk about the book of Judges
where the story comes from if you think it is needed
give me your thoughts on that, Charlie
[note] chorus's could be longer, no problem
Chris Brownell
#1
Charlie, you seem to have two completely different themes and stories going on here. The first theme or story involves the memory of your mother giving you a Bible to help you through some difficulty. The second theme or story relates to the mission of the Gideons (spreading the Word of God free of charge to the world) and connecting that mission to the Gideon of the Book of Judges (a military leader, who was victorious against the odds).
If I were you, I would pick one theme or the other, or try to establish a solid connection between the two different themes/stories. If you want to connect all the themes together, I would organize your song as follows:
VERSE 1: Talk about the Gideon of the Book of Judges and what he did.
VERSE 2: Talk about the mission of the Gideons.
CHORUS: Connect the stories in Verse 1 and Verse 2.
VERSE 3: Connect your personal story to Verses 1 and 2.
(Repeat Chorus)
—Chris
Charlie Resseguie
#2
thank you Chris, I didn't tie the thoughts together, the work of the Gideons was inspired by the story
of him, in the book of Judges [I just mentioned that] and I know they can be comfortably tied together
by the way, the first two verses are because of the work of the Gideons.Thanks for your interest, Charlie
Charlie Resseguie
#3
THAT WAS MY INTENTION, IT IS GOOD THAT YOU KINDA SAW THAT
BUT I DID NOT GET AROUND TO IT YET,AND WILL IN THE FUTURE THANKS
CHRIS WHEN I DO I WILL RUN IT BY YOU, YOU ARE VERY OBSERVANT!!
Chris I would like you to listen to a few of my songs,I'm thinking of possibly doin
some collabs with you but want you to see a little about what I am about
my site is www.soundclick.com/countrycousins I only have about 60 ,tunes on it
but many more in my mp3 folder. I would also like to hear some of your music
to thanks, Charlie
Charlie Resseguie
#4
THIS IS IN THE PROCESS OF BEING RECORDED BY A GOOD FRIEND WHO HAS DONE A LOT OF MUSIC WITH ME, TOM RASELY THANK YOU ALL.