LT,
Really like where this is going but wouod make a suggestion, there is a bit too much telling and not enough showing in the Nashville speack. For instance, although I really like the Prayer like hands line it appears to be emotive, it actually distracted me a bit when reading this, i now know you meant, but, I had to think about it.
I have made an attempt to put a bit of brevity into the V3 V4 and Bridge Section and putting them all into a a single verse ( this isnt definitive of course just a crack at it!)
(Vs)
At the bus shelter then she started sobbing
Standing there with hands at her mouth.
Looking off into the distance and my future
I just said; “you've been untrue"
then into the chorus, instead of Needed, I'm thinking it should probably be
Needing just a Sliver .....
Which for mine says you would accept it still and you are at the precipice of going or staying, a stronger emotive position for the song I believe.
Yours to keep or disregard of course, just ones mans opinion
Arty
It is always tood to see rewrites by the way!