Really like the heart in this and faithfulness shines through. Some really good lines as well. I do believe your song structure could be tweaked some. The verses are differing in length and syllable count and I think it would serve the musician better for writing purposes to have them match more closely, although it can work, it is more difficult for a music writer. Still, I like the lyric overall, as well as the subject matter. Welcome to the forums by the way!
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