Dennis Wright
Song title/ '' A Word From God.''
(C) 2014
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Verse 1:
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Their gonna be some trials and tribulations
We all is gonna have to face someday
Their gonna be some heartache and pain
Along the way
Verse 2:
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A time is gonna come, we might get weary
And waiver in our faith
But no matter what goes on; we must stay strong
And hold on to God's unchanging hand
Chorus:
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When you can't see
A way out
Of all the things that you are going through
All you need is
A word from God
Cause that word along
Will see you through
Verse 3:
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I been serving the Lord for quite a while
And I never seen the righteous forsaken
Are begging for bread; lacking for anything
Cause he promise in his word that he will make away
Chorus:
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When you can't see
A way out
Of all the things that you are going through
All you need is
A word from God
Cause that word along
Will see you through
Bridge Chorus:
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He who dwells in the secret place of the most high
Shall abide under the shadow of the almighty
When times get rough; I will say to the Lord
You is my refuge in your word I will trust
Chorus:
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When you can't see
A way out
Of all the things that you are going through
All you need is
A word from God
Cause that word along
Will see you through
Hi Dennis - welcome to SongRamp! Things are still a bit slow here, as we transition to this new site, but hang in there - it will get better!
So, about your lyric. Clearly, you have expressed your strong faith in these words - truth is always a great place to start. That said, the structure could use a bit of work. I'm inserting some info from a Blog by Nicholas Tozier - good tools to keep in mind! Take another run at this lyric, using one of the "rules" laid out below:
Whether you’re writing poetry, rap lyrics, or songs in any musical genre, different rhyme schemes pull different material out of you.
Trying out a new rhyme scheme disrupts your usual habits and unlocks new ideas. And just like a chord progression, each rhyme scheme creates patterns of suspense and release. Rhyme can make words themselves sound beautifully musical.
Below I’ve listed some four-line rhyme schemes for you to play with. Schemes you’re unfamiliar with may feel a bit strange at first, but stick with them–they can lead to real breakthroughs in your songwriting.
abab
An interlocking rhyme scheme. Rhyme line 1 with line 3; also line 2 with line 4. A classic, often-used rhyme scheme.
xaxa
This scheme’s a little looser and less predictable than some of the others. Rhyme lines 2 and 4; make sure that lines 1 and 3 don’t rhyme. The two non-rhymed lines will allow you some freedom–and save mileage on your rhyming dictionary.
aabb
This scheme divides a section of four lines into two rhymed couplets, each of which sounds kind of complete unto itself.
aaaa
This one’s tough to pull off. To relieve monotony, you might try making some of the lines much shorter than the others—varying line length will make it sound less predictable.
axaa
Line 2 is all alone, left hanging. This scheme contains a bit of tension–try it and see.
abba
A rhyming pair sandwiched inside of another rhyming pair.
axxa
Like XAXA above, AXXA is a wild card. The two middle lines are unpredictable; they don’t rhyme with each other or any other line in the stanza. This one’s a personal favorite of mine; I like the way those two middle lines keep the audience in suspense. I also like the way the last line releases the tension.
Exercise
If you’ve been mostly using ABAB and AABB like I was, try one of the rhyme schemes above for the verse sections of your next song. Write the scheme at the top of the page and get started–if you need a song idea, no worries–you can free write until an interesting lyric premise falls out.
Really like the heart in this and faithfulness shines through. Some really good lines as well. I do believe your song structure could be tweaked some. The verses are differing in length and syllable count and I think it would serve the musician better for writing purposes to have them match more closely, although it can work, it is more difficult for a music writer. Still, I like the lyric overall, as well as the subject matter. Welcome to the forums by the way!
Thank you so much for commenting. I really do appreciate it. God bless! Dennis
Enjoyed the read,Thanks for sharing God's Love.
Thank you so much.