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81 Firebird
by RHDeitch, member since Aug 19, 2004
19 songs |
| Thanks for listening. This is a scratch recording, so i apologize for the production :-) 81 Firebird *Robert Deitch Billy and Katie were that small town scandal, a summer fling they thought they could handle, 2 young hearts, 2 sides of a train track, sneakin* out in his Pontiac, Chrome wheels, turbocharged, painted starlight Black Parked on a dirt road, starin* out the t-tops Bon jovi and a bottle of peach schnapps Talkin bout her dreams and plans she made his touch down catches and glory days, Lift yea they weren*t searchin for anything more Than a couple thrills and an easy score*but Chorus They(He, She) found love in the back of that Firebird Then they found themselves at the alter of her daddy*s church Found their purpose in their newborn baby*s eyes And Jesus one Sunday service in July, Now they know who to give their thanks to they found forever, in an 81 Firebird. .. Verse 2 Billy sold the car for a small down payment Bought em a house with a finished basement Katie worked hard to get her degree, Be a good school teacher and a mother of 3, Billy coached the kids, and did his time at the factory, After 24 years Billy started keeping secrets leave for hours, never say where he went Katie couldn*t help but question his faith But he was too good a man to think he*d ever stray, Lift She didn't know he'd found their Pontiac, tore it to pieces, and restored it back, cause Chorus Bridge The sign at the legion read happy 25th as she stood with her family and friends wondering where his and when she saw that car roll up to the door all the pieces came together, and it couldn't have meant more Chorus | Details:
Uploaded: Jun 7, 2007
Genre: Country (Contemporary)
hifi Size: 7360 KB
lofi Size: 1150 KB
Statistics:
Plays: 257
Reviews: 12
Favored: 8
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rk8257
2007-06-08
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Can't wait to hear the finished version of this one. Nice ending. Great picture painting throughout. The lift on the chorus is killer. Rick | HarryLeff
2007-06-08
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Hey you hooked me. I couldnt look away waiting for what happened. Really great lyrics and well sung. Were you out of breath? lol | RJC
2007-06-08
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Great tune, I too look forward to the full production, good stuff! | donnavalentine
2007-06-08
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I get everything you do. Great crafting here. Seemed to take a tad too long to get to the chorus. I like the storyline, and you've got some incredibly fresh lyrics with great imagery. V2 seemed a bit forced (mostly the secrets line). I'd like to see that verse give less of the car away, and same in the bridge, and then C3 starts with "He drove up in an 81 Firebird/with new chrome wheels and a shiny grill...." Just thinking out loud here... what you have is great. As usual, your song grabs me. You are such a great writer. | ande
2007-06-09
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hi robert,
this is really good, great imagery
love your voice and nice production
another solid strong song | jarrod11
2007-06-18
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Im predicting super great things for you and this song! Wanna bet with me? Awesome bro!!!!!
jarrod | rayf
2007-06-25
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Real nice story song...cool melody and a clever colorful lyric...well done...and the demo is just fine as far as I can hear...Ray | Germain_Brunet
2007-06-25
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This song has HIT potential written all over it. One thing I would say though is that I think the song would be stronger if you could start the second lift right after the line "did his time in the factory". I know you'd have to change the lyrics somewhat. I say this because I feels like it takes too long to get to the second chorus. One other thing if I may...the Bridge is almost perfect as it reveals why he's been keeping secrets...excellent, EXCEPT for the fact that the reason is giving away prior to that in the lift before the second chorus. I know that he hasn't told her yet at that point of the song, but you've told your audience that that's what he's doing and that ruined the surprise for the listener. Still, I really like this lyric and melody...and your voice is so good and perfect for this. I can definitely hear Montgomery Gentry and Trace Adkins...all over this one.
Germain | 37records
2007-06-26
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Nice writing on the lyric and making the melody work. Good place to take the melody on the opening line of the chorus.
Be careful signing it away without reversion. Murrah's company will want 100% and no reversion...so..work it! The full demo will sell this in Nashville. | Flyingsheep
2007-06-30
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Robert. nice work. I don't think it's as commercial as "Just Outside My Window"...but that's just one man's opinion. Good luck with the tune...
Robert the Flyingsheep | poorandneedy
2007-07-12
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Wow...reminds of Anthony Smith. Dang this is a strong tune.Love the story! Nice writing. Thanks--Greg | gilles
2010-01-05
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yes I agree wow
Like this style and sound
well performed and love the production |
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